Goddammit, Plum. Don’t be You Had No Goddamn Reason To Not Tell Me More Sooner Tier client.
Starting off with three gavel slams, eh?
Not proper transition at the start and end of testimony.
I wrote in the autopsy report that it was pretty obvious he was dead of blood loss – You are a coroner now, Ema?
Let’s kidnap Udgy to have a natural mediator during gangs negotiation. I’m amazed, Plum.
Lol passage sealed.
Olga is the Club’s owner now?
If she conveniently sealed the passage, she is a likely mastermind.
Anyway, Klavier is really strangely aggressive, but I see Apollo notices it as well. Still, you are the last person to call anyone a lackey, Gavin.
The contradiction that the ring isn’t meaningless is too much of grasping straws to my liking.
I hope there is a decent payoff for Klavier being so aggressive.
Well, the branching path? Udgy is going to testify against Plum cuz he got somehow fooled, but Plum is a You Had No Goddamn Reason To Not Tell Me More Sooner Tier client. Sigh, let’s make her talk.
... I REALLY hope there is a decent payoff for Klavier hiding that his most reliable witness was wearing a blindfold.
Oh, so we are switching witnesses.
Just because he heard them doesn’t mean they weren’t recorded.
Yep, Apollo can be upset about people not telling him things. SoJ didn’t happen yet ;P
Wocky’s portion was fast. Good.
Viola’s theme is great.
How did you get back into the force?
Nobody opened the can to notice the knife inside? I know AA police and all, but come on, Ema was investigating.
Why I can’t call Orly, given that Sunday contacts people with control over the crime scene? She is the crime scene’s owner.
Alright, the evidence -> witness route remains bugged, so I do it the other way around.
Anyway, I more and more think that Klavier is Sunday.
Oh, so he was just blackmailed? I know he was a prick for long, but the change of heart itself happened quickly. But if not Klavier is Sunday than who? Edgeworth? Judge? Meekins?
Dee and Yogi? Well, that has potential.
So, Yogi is trusted by Sunday? If somebody besides Edgeworth can be connected to Yogi, it is the Judge due to Yogi being a former bailiff.
... Well, we could already deduce that Yogi knows Sunday from Dee telling us that Yogi meet with him personally in prison.
Welp, and Sunday poisoned Yogi.
Phoenix ex machina.
So Udgy Bro is the final boss?
Evil Udgy Bro sprites are great.
Blackout scene was great, just like the “LOLOLOL JUDGES CONSTANTLY TOUCH EVIDENCE”
For a first case, it was really impressive. There are still few things to fix (I noticed that Apollo’s mouth wasn’t speaking at some point and he popped up hovering over the witness stand during one of Plum’s testimonies), and there are some kinda rushed scenes characterization wise or logic wise.
Besides that, Klavier’s arc was... Okay. That for him at stake it wasn’t just career, but also Kristoph getting executed sooner, was solid enough. From what I saw, most fans assume that Klavier just hated Kristoph, but for me that’s a) boring and b) contradicts with the fact he, for seven years, sat on the knowledge of Kristoph being Zak’s original attorney that warned him about Phoenix, while Kristoph moved on acting as Wright’s friend.
Evil Udgy Bro was great and his motive was solid and brilliantly based on established continuity. Phoenix was okay, but there wasn’t much of any arc for him. There was stuff I liked, like Wocky taking the fall for his mother, even if in the most idiotic way imaginable, and Yogi giving up easily. But with tons of witnesses not many had a chance to shine and the only good ones were Viola, and (of all people) Meekins. Viola was well written, felt like a character with own agenda and even turned out to be essential to catching her grandfather’s real killer. As for Meekins, he was an original usage of the character and the only accomplice that didn’t join the villain because “lol we are stock bad guys from previous cases anyway”.
Udgy wasn't bad either, but he is the biggest problem with the plot I have. Okay, Plum can be crazy enough to think kidnapping him for a meeting with another criminal is a good enough idea. But how did Evil Udgy could know that Wocky wouldn't do the kidnapping job personally? The entire plan relied on the real Udgy showing up way too early and unsupervised, but that happening was due to the out of anybody's control Wocky. Which means that the crime could be plotted only due to a reaction to Wocky's actions. Wasn't that too little time to plan something so elaborate?
As for Apollo, he had an arc and a chance to shine against very strong enemy. He was good enough. I don’t say that anything particularly bad was about him, just nothing mind blowing (like Evul Judge was).
And I had to re-read SoC to remind myself that Ema was there. Though she had some good moment, but then she disappeared completely.
Perhaps things with characters would look better if you added standard AA epilogue, that showed more in detail what was up with everyone else.
Don’t get discouraged due to the bugs. It is your first trial here, and you still pulled ton of nonstandard cross-examinations. It’s already a solid 7/10 case, and has potential for more. Definitely the best author’s very first case I’m aware of.