wow the presentation here is really good
also i'm liking this premise a lot
"This might turn into be the most
bizarre mess he's ever gotten
himself involved in."
typo, remove the word "be" or reword
"November 25
Jupiter Estate
Lounge"
anyone reason why this isn't centered?
the fact that apollo isn't in the profiles concernes me, this does not bode well for apollo
"*Sigh*"
should this be capitalized? also could do with a shake
"Even if, no matter how many
times you do it, it ends up sounding ridiculous just as crazy as before..."
redundant
for some reason i feel like phoenix is this thief man, i don't know why. could be apollo??? idk i feel like we know this person
in the newspaper:
" I shall, of course, take percautions of my own"
should be PREcautions
"Marrascaud has been determined to be either a single individual or a group"
i thought phoenix said that he was determined to be an indvidual?
okay this kyle jupiter guy is creeping me out just a tad
"Hot DAMN you are scary-looking!"
widget reading both mine and athena's thoughts
also isn't widget's text yellow?
phoenix, despite going to art school, does not seem to have any taste in art
"should be impossible"
ha, ha ha
this entire premise would be perfect for an aai game
dang this is intense, first a blackout and then someone being murdered probably
RIP in peace
random flashback to his mother for some reason? this is probably relevant
hmm... this really sarcastic, biting comments phoenix is thinking regarding athena responding to him taking the case seem a bit out of character, iirc. hobo phoenix was snarky but not bitingly sarcastic like apollo. then again this could come with the phoenix you're writing in response to trucy leaving, idk
ohhh lord it's fulbright
you are a cruel, cruel man, dwam
"(Bobby Fulbright.
She self-proclaimed warrior of
justice.)"
should be "The", not "She"
"overkill", huh? not much of an invisible thief then...
"The backup generator is hooked
do a different power box, so
it wasn't affected by the EMP."
should be "to", not "do"
"Well, erm, not "anything".
Just... "must things". Or,
well, "some things", I guess."
"must" should be "most
"I practically walked into the
hospital, by hands gone and
bleedin' everywhere and told them:"
"by" should be "my"
"the dragon"... hm, something tells me this isn't a coincidence
the mystery of this prosecutor... hm
~*~*~trial time~*~*~
something tells me that this mystery man is von karma
OH MY GOD WHAT TRUCY WHAT
"A theft and murder...
Sounds interesting."
should be female blips here
all of her lines after that line need to be female blips
oh is this intentional??
oh the prosecutor is a new dude, cool beans
his name wouldn't have to do with the reichenbach fall, would it?
i'm so confused why is reichenbach impersonating a prosecutor
what even is this whisper conversation
SOMEBODY THAT I USED TO KNOWWWWWWWWWWWWW
just a comment, it's very confusing when you make present texts like "And it's all because of this
fact...!" because if the player immediately forgets what's going on, then they're completely clueless. then again, maybe that's just me.
"LOUD-ASS DOORS, ANYONE?"
seems a bit out of character for phoenix
i should've known that it was trucy
"I'm gone?
Where did I run off too?"
should be "to", not "too"
why can't kane just tell us all of this stuff? seems like a bit of a plot hole to me
OH MY GOD THAT EXPLAINS SO MUCH WITH JUPITER BEING IN THE VAULT AFTER FULBRIGHT SAID HE WENT OUTSIDE AHHHH
wait but how would they talk to the trucy disguised as mr jupiter??? wouldn't it be obvious that it wasn't him
also if trucy was in the mansion how would she prepare a disguise like that?????? she'd need materials and things
and how would she breathe while in the vault?
dammit why are you making me experience these wright family feels
IS THAT APOLLO???????
"(...It didn't changed the fact that
the true culprit had gotten
away.)"
"change" not "changed"
pls no clapollo feels
hm... didn't a murder occur in this jail cell?
"Clay wasn't a coward. And
neither was Mr. Sturbuck or
even Director Cosmos!"
"Starbuck" not "Sturbuck"
THEY CAN'T PUT IN HER PRISON FOR THAT LONG ITS NOT OKAY
...................................................................
i have choice words for you, dwam. choice. words.
"...But then Daddy said "no
pls", and here I am."
this seems a little out of place
"They haven more reason to
look into it."
"have no" not "haven"
gasp, a flashback!
GASP IT'S HER!!!!
oh my god it's mother theresa
"However -- the door to it
is the a good one. And it's
an impenetrable one."
the whole first sentence needs to be rewritten
"no pressing"
as a trial author, the thought of not having to write press conversation gives me life
man this prosecutor's lobby is so nice
when asking trucy "any ideas":
"YOU were phone!"
i don't understand
"ian moriarty"
"compton baskerville"
ok dwam
who the heck is eileen
"My initial fortune came from
my father. He was a world-renown
artist."
"world-renowned" not "world-renown"
the drama.......
"It's so good too see you" or something like that, said by athena to apollo
"to" not "too"
any particular reason you're playing trucy's theme and not athena's theme?
dang i dunno who made them, but these phoenix front sprites are very nice
AHH THE THREE WITNESSES WERE MURDERED BY THE DRAGON
jesus christ this dragon dude is disturbed
damn they got moriarty too?????
MORIARTY WAS WRIGHT'S BROTHER???????????????????????????????
geez this is a long trial, i started like like 5 hours ago
wait that guy doesn't look like the moriarty from the trial
after presenting the people who screamed:
"Yes...
This makes sense."
needs a nametag
"--> THE RIGHT ANSWR <--"
what
"(...I bet you're the type of
guy that clicks on the "free iPad"
pop up, aren't you?)"
i hate u dwam
after the phantom leaves:
"November 29
Wright Anything Agency
Phoenix's Office"
needs to be the typewriter blips
christ almighty this dragon guy is disturbed
"I posses valuable information
related to the case!"
"possess" not "posses"
dwam. i swear to GOD if they're about to declare that grossberg is the dragon.
DWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I SWEAR TO GOD AFTER SPENDING 7 HOURS ON THIS CASE
i hate u so much right now, dwam.
here he is. the buns of steel.
i can't believe this is happening
I SWEAR TO GOD DWAM IF GROSSBERG ISNT THE DRAGON
WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT
(by the way apollo shouts something out during grossberg's testimony so you might need to remove that)
the. JUDGEEEEEEEE?????????????????????????????????????????????
"Giving physical evidence that
you witnessed a robbery is
night-impossible."
"nigh" not "night"
and jupiter was a villain. what even.
jesus. christ.
by the way i went back and played bad ending one and it was even more painful that i imagined