This is a short story made for the "Never Trust The Narrator" competition, clocking in at just under 1000 frames. It's not a murder mystery at all, so don't expect one. It'd be more accurate to say that it sort of has Slice of Life elements, but that's mostly due to it containing a lot of banter. Expect it to mostly be pretty slow-paced. It's not quite a kinetic novel since there are a couple of choices (leading to one of three endings), but those are close to the end and this is mostly a thing you read rather than play. A walkthrough is provided, but you really shouldn't need it, and the choices are somewhat spoilery in nature, so... Don't look at it unless you absolutely have to for whatever reason.
[M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ●
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[M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ●
Link is here. Hope you enjoy.
This is a short story made for the "Never Trust The Narrator" competition, clocking in at just under 1000 frames. It's not a murder mystery at all, so don't expect one. It'd be more accurate to say that it sort of has Slice of Life elements, but that's mostly due to it containing a lot of banter. Expect it to mostly be pretty slow-paced. It's not quite a kinetic novel since there are a couple of choices (leading to one of three endings), but those are close to the end and this is mostly a thing you read rather than play. A walkthrough is provided, but you really shouldn't need it, and the choices are somewhat spoilery in nature, so... Don't look at it unless you absolutely have to for whatever reason.
This is a short story made for the "Never Trust The Narrator" competition, clocking in at just under 1000 frames. It's not a murder mystery at all, so don't expect one. It'd be more accurate to say that it sort of has Slice of Life elements, but that's mostly due to it containing a lot of banter. Expect it to mostly be pretty slow-paced. It's not quite a kinetic novel since there are a couple of choices (leading to one of three endings), but those are close to the end and this is mostly a thing you read rather than play. A walkthrough is provided, but you really shouldn't need it, and the choices are somewhat spoilery in nature, so... Don't look at it unless you absolutely have to for whatever reason.
Spoiler : Walkthrough :
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Current AAO projects (to be completed eventually, probably, hopefully): A Silly Little Dream (hopefully 2024), My Dearest Direst Disgrace (hopefully 2025)
Stuff I've made on here: QotU
Make My Life Worse
Malleus Maleficarum: The Witch of San Ignacio
The Six Transgender Lesbian Goddesses of Love Are Having A Petty Argument, So They Try To Settle Things Alongside The Three Transgender Gay Gods of Flavor
Defend Him, Not Me!
The Guardian and the Dreamer
I was a guest judge and did a bit of writing for the TICKING TIME BOMB competition.
My Twitter is here
Avatar is of Marth from Fire Emblem, commissioned from @PiyoStoria on Twitter.
Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ●
Yaaay.
For someone who doesn't much like what usually counts as "SoL," laughing like 3 times over the course of this thing was unexpected. Really nice short story, would recommend reading/playing/watching/absorbing any time.
For someone who doesn't much like what usually counts as "SoL," laughing like 3 times over the course of this thing was unexpected. Really nice short story, would recommend reading/playing/watching/absorbing any time.
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ●
Yaaay, it was a good entry. A nice chill read. You should go read it.
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ●
I liked this.
Spoiler : Short Review :
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ●
Spoiler : Write-Up thing- some spoilers :
"With good friends by your side, anything is possible. If you really care for each other, it makes everyone stronger! Then you'll have the will to succeed! The world is filled with painful things, it's sad sometimes, and you won't be able to handle it by yourself. But just know: If there's someone that you love, you'll stay on the right path. And you won't ever give in! As long as you keep that person in your heart, you'll keep getting back up. Understand? That's why a Hero never loses!"
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ●
Spoiler : Response to TheDoctor :
Hosted The Year of Luigi competition (and here's the awards ceremony).
Current AAO projects (to be completed eventually, probably, hopefully): A Silly Little Dream (hopefully 2024), My Dearest Direst Disgrace (hopefully 2025)
Stuff I've made on here: QotU
Make My Life Worse
Malleus Maleficarum: The Witch of San Ignacio
The Six Transgender Lesbian Goddesses of Love Are Having A Petty Argument, So They Try To Settle Things Alongside The Three Transgender Gay Gods of Flavor
Defend Him, Not Me!
The Guardian and the Dreamer
I was a guest judge and did a bit of writing for the TICKING TIME BOMB competition.
My Twitter is here
Avatar is of Marth from Fire Emblem, commissioned from @PiyoStoria on Twitter.
Current AAO projects (to be completed eventually, probably, hopefully): A Silly Little Dream (hopefully 2024), My Dearest Direst Disgrace (hopefully 2025)
Stuff I've made on here: QotU
Make My Life Worse
Malleus Maleficarum: The Witch of San Ignacio
The Six Transgender Lesbian Goddesses of Love Are Having A Petty Argument, So They Try To Settle Things Alongside The Three Transgender Gay Gods of Flavor
Defend Him, Not Me!
The Guardian and the Dreamer
I was a guest judge and did a bit of writing for the TICKING TIME BOMB competition.
My Twitter is here
Avatar is of Marth from Fire Emblem, commissioned from @PiyoStoria on Twitter.
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ☆
☆ This case is pending a QA inspection to be featured.
QA needs to sort out some details about the criteria for reviewing a miscellaneous case. One of us will post here once we have the preliminaries straightened out.
Good luck to GD!
QA needs to sort out some details about the criteria for reviewing a miscellaneous case. One of us will post here once we have the preliminaries straightened out.
Good luck to GD!
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ☆
Oooooh, good luck GD!
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ☆
Good luck, GD! Even though I haven't played it (yet), I hope it gets fearured!
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ☆
Alright, the basic procedural points:
Tentatively, QA is of the opinion that the criteria we have currently are fine, with some simple alteration. We won't apply AA-specific criteria here, and we emphasize that the format for the case should be fitting and not gimmicky. We may add new criteria mid-QA, if something comes up. Since both Evo and BP have already played this before, I'll be taking the lead on this one. There will likely be more discussion amongst us than usual for this.
I'm hoping to have played this through by the 16th!
Tentatively, QA is of the opinion that the criteria we have currently are fine, with some simple alteration. We won't apply AA-specific criteria here, and we emphasize that the format for the case should be fitting and not gimmicky. We may add new criteria mid-QA, if something comes up. Since both Evo and BP have already played this before, I'll be taking the lead on this one. There will likely be more discussion amongst us than usual for this.
I'm hoping to have played this through by the 16th!
[D]isordered speech is not so much injury to the lips that give it forth, as to the disproportion and incoherence of things in themselves, so negligently expressed. ~ Ben Jonson
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ☆
One point I'm confused about...
Spoiler : Spoilers! :
[D]isordered speech is not so much injury to the lips that give it forth, as to the disproportion and incoherence of things in themselves, so negligently expressed. ~ Ben Jonson
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ☆
Enthalpy wrote:One point I'm confused about...
Spoiler : Spoilers! :
Spoiler : Spoiler Responses :
Hosted The Year of Luigi competition (and here's the awards ceremony).
Current AAO projects (to be completed eventually, probably, hopefully): A Silly Little Dream (hopefully 2024), My Dearest Direst Disgrace (hopefully 2025)
Stuff I've made on here: QotU
Make My Life Worse
Malleus Maleficarum: The Witch of San Ignacio
The Six Transgender Lesbian Goddesses of Love Are Having A Petty Argument, So They Try To Settle Things Alongside The Three Transgender Gay Gods of Flavor
Defend Him, Not Me!
The Guardian and the Dreamer
I was a guest judge and did a bit of writing for the TICKING TIME BOMB competition.
My Twitter is here
Avatar is of Marth from Fire Emblem, commissioned from @PiyoStoria on Twitter.
Current AAO projects (to be completed eventually, probably, hopefully): A Silly Little Dream (hopefully 2024), My Dearest Direst Disgrace (hopefully 2025)
Stuff I've made on here: QotU
Make My Life Worse
Malleus Maleficarum: The Witch of San Ignacio
The Six Transgender Lesbian Goddesses of Love Are Having A Petty Argument, So They Try To Settle Things Alongside The Three Transgender Gay Gods of Flavor
Defend Him, Not Me!
The Guardian and the Dreamer
I was a guest judge and did a bit of writing for the TICKING TIME BOMB competition.
My Twitter is here
Avatar is of Marth from Fire Emblem, commissioned from @PiyoStoria on Twitter.
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ☆
QA Review: The Guardian and the Dreamer
Then testify agai-- Wait, it's not that kind of case?
The Guardian and the Dreamer is the first miscellaneous case that has been submitted to QA for review. While we've had miscellaneous cases before, I believe this is the first pure "slice-of-life" story that has been showcased on AAO. Now that we know what the QA standards are, does this case meet them? Let's find out.
Then testify agai-- Wait, it's not that kind of case?
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The format on Check #1 is completely different from my previous reviews. The checkmark system assumes that you can keep the good and bad points of the areas separate. This assumption completely fails here. Instead, I'll spend Check #1 going into a very detailed "Stream of Consciousness," which allows me to highlight how things from one area affect others.Spoiler : Check #1: Here Be Spoilers! :
Spoiler : Check #2: Here Be Spoilers! :
Spoiler : Conclusion :
[D]isordered speech is not so much injury to the lips that give it forth, as to the disproportion and incoherence of things in themselves, so negligently expressed. ~ Ben Jonson
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Re: [M][CE] The Guardian and the Dreamer ☆
Spoiler : Response to Enthalpy, major spoilers ahoy :
Hosted The Year of Luigi competition (and here's the awards ceremony).
Current AAO projects (to be completed eventually, probably, hopefully): A Silly Little Dream (hopefully 2024), My Dearest Direst Disgrace (hopefully 2025)
Stuff I've made on here: QotU
Make My Life Worse
Malleus Maleficarum: The Witch of San Ignacio
The Six Transgender Lesbian Goddesses of Love Are Having A Petty Argument, So They Try To Settle Things Alongside The Three Transgender Gay Gods of Flavor
Defend Him, Not Me!
The Guardian and the Dreamer
I was a guest judge and did a bit of writing for the TICKING TIME BOMB competition.
My Twitter is here
Avatar is of Marth from Fire Emblem, commissioned from @PiyoStoria on Twitter.
Current AAO projects (to be completed eventually, probably, hopefully): A Silly Little Dream (hopefully 2024), My Dearest Direst Disgrace (hopefully 2025)
Stuff I've made on here: QotU
Make My Life Worse
Malleus Maleficarum: The Witch of San Ignacio
The Six Transgender Lesbian Goddesses of Love Are Having A Petty Argument, So They Try To Settle Things Alongside The Three Transgender Gay Gods of Flavor
Defend Him, Not Me!
The Guardian and the Dreamer
I was a guest judge and did a bit of writing for the TICKING TIME BOMB competition.
My Twitter is here
Avatar is of Marth from Fire Emblem, commissioned from @PiyoStoria on Twitter.