Hello,
I have just released the first part of my first case titled 'A turnabout divided'. Here is the link to part 1
http://www.aaonline.fr/player.php?trial_id=101365 . I will hopefully be releasing the second and final part to this case within a few weeks and will at that point decide whether to make a series of cases or leave it as a standalone
The case follows a rather fresh attorney named Thomas Barker, a quirky potassium loving man tasked with defending his best friend. His best friend Jacob Whyte is a private detective accused of murdering his ex-teacher at an academy where a recent embezzlement scheme has been uncovered. Along the way we meet April May, Thomas's short tempered boss, Molly Mosey, Thomas's girlfriend and Nikkita Peitsche, a prosecutor who used to be a student alongside Tom and Jacob.
I would kindly ask that anyone who tries my case to leave a review so I can learn whether or not it is good. This can be in terms of writing, structure, testimonies, characterisation, plot etc.
Thanks and enjoy!
[T] A turnabout divided part 1
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Re: [T] A turnabout divided part 1
All right, I'll give it a try.
I'm not experienced enough to give a real review, but I enjoyed myself. Plenty of grammar issues and other missing effects, and the puzzle design could use some work, but it's far from irredeemable. I had fun!
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I'm not experienced enough to give a real review, but I enjoyed myself. Plenty of grammar issues and other missing effects, and the puzzle design could use some work, but it's far from irredeemable. I had fun!
I have the stupidest username in all of AAO. Nowhere else will you find one more stupid.
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Re: [T] A turnabout divided part 1
Ok thanks.
I'll get to work making those changes. Also in terms of grammatical errors please bear in mind that Miss Orlov is supposed to speak oddly because she is a 'native Russian'
Also sorry for so much evidence but without it there would have been some major plot holes
I'll get to work making those changes. Also in terms of grammatical errors please bear in mind that Miss Orlov is supposed to speak oddly because she is a 'native Russian'
Also sorry for so much evidence but without it there would have been some major plot holes
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Re: [T] A turnabout divided part 1
Just wanted to inform you all that A turnabout divided part 2 has been released. I believe it is by no means a perfect case however as a starting block for the adventures of Thomas Barker and the May and co Law offices I am very happy with how its gone
I am currently working on my second case 'Turnabout comes to lunch' and hopefully I will be able to release the first part within a few weeks.
I am currently working on my second case 'Turnabout comes to lunch' and hopefully I will be able to release the first part within a few weeks.