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AHHHHHHHH IT SEEMS THAT HE HAS NOT GOTTEN TO ME!

Oh no... I'm going to get shot down because of my lame jokes! AHHHHHHHHH!
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Mimi Mika wrote:AHHHHHHHH IT SEEMS THAT HE HAS NOT GOTTEN TO ME!

Oh no... I'm going to get shot down because of my lame jokes! AHHHHHHHHH!
I'd never shoot you down, Mii-Sama. (=3)
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Spoiler : Mimi's trial :
But Maya would!
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That's too bad, I guess.
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Zeel1 wrote:And by the way, have you seen the Easter Egg yet?
What Easter Egg?
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MilesEdgey's entry: done. List updated.

Well I must admit that the opening gags weren't very funny at all, but once you got going, it became an immensely funny entry. What provided most of the comedy was those sprites that you created, and how everyone slowly came to accept Mia's sexiness, one by one. However, the issue here is that that was the only joke that you relied on to create the humour. Although the joke ended with an extremely funny reaction from the judge, there wasn't really much else. You had a toilet gag, but that wasn't actually funny. If you want to win, you have to have a sustainable amount of laughter throughout the entire trial, and Zeel is the only one who has managed to do that so far.
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Mimi Mika's entry: done. List updated.

Lol. Erm... Well, this trial suffered the same issue as quite a lot of the other trials. The opening wasn't very funny, and when it did get funny near the end, those jokes weren't making me burst out into laughter like some other entries.
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Meph wrote:MilesEdgey's entry: done. List updated.

Well I must admit that the opening gags weren't very funny at all, but once you got going, it became an immensely funny entry. What provided most of the comedy was those sprites that you created, and how everyone slowly came to accept Mia's sexiness, one by one. However, the issue here is that that was the only joke that you relied on to create the humour. Although the joke ended with an extremely funny reaction from the judge, there wasn't really much else. You had a toilet gag, but that wasn't actually funny. If you want to win, you have to have a sustainable amount of laughter throughout the entire trial, and Zeel is the only one who has managed to do that so far.
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Alright, I appreciate the feedback and I'll take on board what you said for any future comedies I make. :)
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Moltor's entry: done. List updated.

Censor swear words please!

Although the opening did contain jokes in this one, the jokes were very flat, and didn't make me laugh at all. Humour in AAO trials usually rely on randomness and craziness, which was non-existent in this trial. I did laugh a few times, but this felt more like a normal trial than a comedy.
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We are now still waiting on:
  • Hodou Masaka
  • Wackyman
  • Nevfx
  • That Guy
I'll give them time to send me their trials, so that their hard work doesn't go to waste. But I don't want to wait too long.
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See, see! I knew it! I knew the opening wasn't very funny!

...I should have went with Phoenix Wright's Revenge... :D Oh well. Time for a new comedy!
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Meph wrote:Flare's entry: done. List updated.

It was quite a disappointment, Flare, because it was no where near as funny as the prequel. You can do better than this. Even still, it was funny, and you included a few funny jokes, but they weren't enough to sustain any laughter. A good attempt, either way.

I'll continue the judging process tomorrow. ;)
Had a feeling it wasn't funnier. I used all the best parts for the prequel ;)
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Meph wrote:
Zeel1 wrote:And by the way, have you seen the Easter Egg yet?
What Easter Egg?
This one: http://aceattorney.sparklin.org/jeu.php ... cement=874
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Zeel1 wrote:
Meph wrote:
Zeel1 wrote:And by the way, have you seen the Easter Egg yet?
What Easter Egg?
This one: http://aceattorney.sparklin.org/jeu.php ... cement=874
0_O

It's an endless loop of Valiant with music that keeps saying "A phantom's up".
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Meph wrote:0_O

It's an endless loop of Valiant with music that keeps saying "A phantom's up".
It's an internet mini-fad, called Leek Spin. Started with this;

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1wnE4vF9CQ4

Valant's cane is the Leek, in this case. :P

Doing the avancement also adds extra evidence to the court record. :)
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