Crossed Paths ~ The Crossover Central Novelisation (Part 7)
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Re: Crossed Paths ~ The Crossover Central Novelisation (Part
You spelt definitely wrong and left a "Crossover Central" not changed into "Crossing Central". Nitpicks aside, looks like things are getting more interesting. I trust Dark Super Sonic's appearance here will be a bit more satisfactory than his, what, 10 seconds of screen time in Sonic X?
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Thanks, LP. Glad you liked it. And regarding Zac, he just didn't fit in with the darker tone I'm trying to accomplish here, aha... nothing against the mutt, I just couldn't fit him. XDLunchPolice wrote:Nice work. I like how you explained Vegeta's strength, his evilness, and the meteor. Very good.
I love the interaction between Dubsy and Dr Eggman.
Dark Super Sonic, huh? I think I've heard of that. It's from Sonic X, right?
... Wait what happened to Vegeta's dog Zac? I know it's not from DBZ, but scrapping Zac
is just sad! You TOOK AWAY HIS DOG YOU JERK
Drat, and double drat. XDRemilia Scarlet wrote:You spelt definitely wrong and left a "Crossover Central" not changed into "Crossing Central". Nitpicks aside, looks like things are getting more interesting. I trust Dark Super Sonic's appearance here will be a bit more satisfactory than his, what, 10 seconds of screen time in Sonic X?
But thanks, I'll change them in due time.
Oh, and I assure you it will be. I'm reinventing the duels between Vegeta and Sonic, and Vegeta and Spider-Man (Round 1).
Hopefully, it should be good.
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Not the guilt trip NOT THE GUILT TRIP. ._.
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Part 5 is now up. I personally think it's the best chapter to date, but judge for yourselves.
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Hooray for a GLaDOS appearance!
That was really well written. Also: Are you doing something like Death in the diskworld series? (GLaDOS appearing for at least half a second in each installment) Because that would be very entertaining.
That was really well written. Also: Are you doing something like Death in the diskworld series? (GLaDOS appearing for at least half a second in each installment) Because that would be very entertaining.
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Ok that was really good. Well written, very interesting. Looks like things are improving now that you have a bit more freedom. But there's one thing you must change. Vegeta doesn't use the Kamehameha. He's never used it. In fact, he'd probably despise using it as it's the main energy beam of his fiercest rival. Vegeta using a Kamehameha is extremely out of character. Change it to a Final Flash and we're all good.
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Thanks, LP! And thanks for that - I just assumed that most saiyans could use that attack, Vegeta included. I shall make the change post-haste.LunchPolice wrote:Ok that was really good. Well written, very interesting. Looks like things are improving now that you have a bit more freedom. But there's one thing you must change. Vegeta doesn't use the Kamehameha. He's never used it. In fact, he'd probably despise using it as it's the main energy beam of his fiercest rival. Vegeta using a Kamehameha is extremely out of character. Change it to a Final Flash and we're all good.
Something like that. I find GLaDOS an interesting character to write for - there may just be moments like that throughout the future episodes.Drey Wilkins wrote:Hooray for a GLaDOS appearance!
That was really well written. Also: Are you doing something like Death in the diskworld series? (GLaDOS appearing for at least half a second in each installment) Because that would be very entertaining.
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Haha, it was actually a human who invented the Kamehameha. Btw if you ever need help with Vegeta just PM me, I know WAY too much about DBZ.ShadowEdgeworth wrote:Thanks, LP! And thanks for that - I just assumed that most saiyans could use that attack, Vegeta included. I shall make the change post-haste.LunchPolice wrote:Ok that was really good. Well written, very interesting. Looks like things are improving now that you have a bit more freedom. But there's one thing you must change. Vegeta doesn't use the Kamehameha. He's never used it. In fact, he'd probably despise using it as it's the main energy beam of his fiercest rival. Vegeta using a Kamehameha is extremely out of character. Change it to a Final Flash and we're all good.
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There's a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes in the part with Jayden.
It felt like a waste to have Dark Super Sonic when he didn't even injure Vegeta. Although Vegeta was twitching at the end, so maybe he was hurt after all? If not, it would be disappointing, to say the least. And I really hope Sonic escaped that blast somehow. I know he died early on in the RP without it being an issue(at least I think so) but he's barely just arrived in CC here. I'm hoping the next chapter will make me appreciate this one.
It felt like a waste to have Dark Super Sonic when he didn't even injure Vegeta. Although Vegeta was twitching at the end, so maybe he was hurt after all? If not, it would be disappointing, to say the least. And I really hope Sonic escaped that blast somehow. I know he died early on in the RP without it being an issue(at least I think so) but he's barely just arrived in CC here. I'm hoping the next chapter will make me appreciate this one.
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Wright Anything Agency: Phoenix Wright
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Re: Crossed Paths ~ The Crossover Central Novelisation (Part
Part... 5? Part 5. Already.
I still haven't found the time to sit down and read, but this is going at a blistering pace, and there's clearly a ton of content in each chapter. Keep it up, it's great to see you back in action again. ^_^
I still haven't found the time to sit down and read, but this is going at a blistering pace, and there's clearly a ton of content in each chapter. Keep it up, it's great to see you back in action again. ^_^
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Come on SE, Don't let me rub off on you.Remilia Scarlet wrote:There's a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes in the part with Jayden.
You did a hell of a lot better with Norman then I did. Part 5 was awesome.
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THIS IS STILL ALIVE. I am getting back to writing this today.
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AFTER A LENGTHY DELAY...
Crossed Paths is back in action, with a brand new part in the first post...
I present, Part 6 - Hidden Pain.
Crossed Paths is back in action, with a brand new part in the first post...
I present, Part 6 - Hidden Pain.
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I Gotta tell you Shadow. I'm very impressed with how in-character you were with Nahman. Back then, despite my knowledge of Heavy Rain, it was very difficult for me to role play as Jayden because of my inexperience and his lack of back story. Hell, it still is. We've only seen Jayden's work life from the game. (DAMN YOU SONY AND YOUR PS MOVE!)
Also, you would make Norman a fan of Star Trek.
Also, you would make Norman a fan of Star Trek.
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