@Kwando: Thank you my loyal haipe servant.
@Gumpei: Huzzah.
@Tap: Don't give me any ideas.
@Alnar: Huh... I thought about specific music playing in the fic too. That's a surprisingly good fit.
@NN: Again, the plot is supposed to be an Excuse Plot (It's honestly a tribute to many crossover games that had bad excuse plots but pretend not to, and focus on character interaction... It IS a crackfic, after all), which... I'm not sure if that justifies it or not. A part of me thinks that makes the criticisms about the plot invalid since it's a stylistic choice, while another part of me thinks that I'm making excuses and need to accept it. As bad as this will make me sound, writing this fic is also something that I'm doing just so I can have fun with it, and that mostly involves extremely random lighthearted nonsense. I've been reading far too many depressing/bittersweet pieces of fiction lately, so I wanted to balance it out with this as a form of self-therapy. I think it becomes extremely obvious later when everyone lampshades everything and the pesky fourth wall disappears around chapter 4. Also, I'm still confused by why people think it's similar to Sleuf's fic, but I have an extremely awful memory, so I'll just accept it. At least you can rest assured that the ending will be completely different.
@DWaM: That's basically the only place where I could put it without myself appearing, though. I need to keep my own gender a secret. Also I've never heard you say that being a detective is NN's job... I need to be online more often.
Anyway,
Chapter 3 is now up. I'm using this chapter as a "test chapter" for "writing dialogue properly", to see if that actually makes it better, or if it takes away part of the charm. Unfortunately, I also believe that Chapter 3 is the low point of this crackfic, since the tone clashes with the rest of the fic (I remember that I was actually trying to have a serious plot, then decided against it after this chapter)... I didn't decide on the tone of the fic until about chapter 4 (which, incidentally, was my favorite chapter to write), because I am an extremely smart person who only has a vague idea of where the fic was going. I tried adding a few revisions to make it fit the tone of the rest of the fic later, but it still feels a bit off.