The RPer's Feedback Thread
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Don't go easy on me, but please be kind~.
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enigma, please tell us what you want feedback on.
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My RPing in general, please.
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...Well, can you narrow it down? Give us categories, at least?enigma wrote:My RPing in general, please.
Like Characters, GMing, Writing Style, or something?
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Characters and writing style, then.
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Re: The RPer's Feedback Thread
Don't go to hard on my or too soft.
I guess what I would like just a general opinion of my characters. Which are your fav's and why? What would you improve about them?
I guess what I would like just a general opinion of my characters. Which are your fav's and why? What would you improve about them?
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GO... ah... MEDIUM on me!
I want an opinion on what I should do with Cold State. It's been going SLOW lately and I don't know why. I mean people aren't posting but for what reason? I'm not sure... Something about the RP feels empty, even to me. WHAT SHOULD I DO!
I want an opinion on what I should do with Cold State. It's been going SLOW lately and I don't know why. I mean people aren't posting but for what reason? I'm not sure... Something about the RP feels empty, even to me. WHAT SHOULD I DO!
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Re: The RPer's Feedback Thread
I won't be able to type up feedback for a while (And even then, I'm only giving criticism to some people who I feel like I know enough about their writing) but a quick question, LP. You asked for a "five" on the harshness scale, but never said what the scale was out of. Was it out of 10? Out of 5? Something else?
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Well, that's a pretty major crisis for a zombie apocalypse, and there's really only so much you can do without ending up cliche, or losing sight of the original work. Frankly, with how base and cliche most zombie apocalypse stories are, you should be pretty proud that you've kept it running for so long without people getting bored.Kruiser666 wrote:GO... ah... MEDIUM on me!
I want an opinion on what I should do with Cold State. It's been going SLOW lately and I don't know why. I mean people aren't posting but for what reason? I'm not sure... Something about the RP feels empty, even to me. WHAT SHOULD I DO!
In this case, it might be good to establish some sort of goal; something attainable but always just out of reach. Like Thereme's death in ET; so long as he's there, the story goes on, and trying to kill him is what (presumably) the heroes' ultimate goal is.
For a zombie RP, it's less straightforward. Usually, the only thing that can end the zombie outbreak is some kind of magical cure or vaccine-- But once you've gotten your hands on it, there realy isn't much left to do, except for go back to your normal lives.
However, there could be a twist on this. Creating a vaccine might be an interesting story, so long as you keep it JUST out of reach. It would drive the characters on when you have nothing else to do, and could allow for creative ways for the players to try and get their hands on it, only to be foiled at the last second by a zombie attack, or maybe the vaccine didn't even work at all; or worse, it makes even BIGGER zombies.
Then again, I don't know. These are just suggestions I'm throwing out here. I don't read/follow CS, but that's just a problem I see with a lot of zombie fiction. There's only so many times you can shove a grenade down a zombie's throat before it gets tiring.
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Re: The RPer's Feedback Thread
CS has the goal to escape New York, actually. I feel more work needs to be done on the in-between to help players have an idea of what to do. Perhaps some stronger GM influence might be needed to create more places to go?Shadowsleuth wrote:Well, that's a pretty major crisis for a zombie apocalypse, and there's really only so much you can do without ending up cliche, or losing sight of the original work. Frankly, with how base and cliche most zombie apocalypse stories are, you should be pretty proud that you've kept it running for so long without people getting bored.Kruiser666 wrote:GO... ah... MEDIUM on me!
I want an opinion on what I should do with Cold State. It's been going SLOW lately and I don't know why. I mean people aren't posting but for what reason? I'm not sure... Something about the RP feels empty, even to me. WHAT SHOULD I DO!
In this case, it might be good to establish some sort of goal; something attainable but always just out of reach. Like Thereme's death in ET; so long as he's there, the story goes on, and trying to kill him is what (presumably) the heroes' ultimate goal is.
For a zombie RP, it's less straightforward. Usually, the only thing that can end the zombie outbreak is some kind of magical cure or vaccine-- But once you've gotten your hands on it, there realy isn't much left to do, except for go back to your normal lives.
However, there could be a twist on this. Creating a vaccine might be an interesting story, so long as you keep it JUST out of reach. It would drive the characters on when you have nothing else to do, and could allow for creative ways for the players to try and get their hands on it, only to be foiled at the last second by a zombie attack, or maybe the vaccine didn't even work at all; or worse, it makes even BIGGER zombies.
Then again, I don't know. These are just suggestions I'm throwing out here. I don't read/follow CS, but that's just a problem I see with a lot of zombie fiction. There's only so many times you can shove a grenade down a zombie's throat before it gets tiring.
Also, CS is sort of in the FW era of RPs that got a lot of sign-ups but nowadays most of the players don't really RP often and the plot moves sorta slowly. More sign-ups would probably be helpful in actually getting it back into action.
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Well shows how much I know. >_>
I'd like to do some reviews here, but I'm probably going to use my free time to actually RP. I DO want critiques, but I'll wait until everyone else has gotten some for them. Don't want this to end up like the request topic.
I'd like to do some reviews here, but I'm probably going to use my free time to actually RP. I DO want critiques, but I'll wait until everyone else has gotten some for them. Don't want this to end up like the request topic.
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Oh, right. It's out of ten.GuardianDreamer wrote:I won't be able to type up feedback for a while (And even then, I'm only giving criticism to some people who I feel like I know enough about their writing) but a quick question, LP. You asked for a "five" on the harshness scale, but never said what the scale was out of. Was it out of 10? Out of 5? Something else?
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On the topic of Cold State, I have actually tried to attract players to a church for a side mission but it doesn't seem to be working. I have a plan and everything but it has been months and we still haven't gotten there yet...
Any other things I could try?
Any other things I could try?
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Find some more sub-plots to try out for players. Heck, I can loan Claus Vladimir to the plot, since he's sort of a villainous character. Just try and organize things to a point where it might appeal to more players and give more options, as well as make things easier for anybody new.
NOW SOMEBODY
CHARACTER OPINONS PLZ
NOW SOMEBODY
CHARACTER OPINONS PLZ
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Re: The RPer's Feedback Thread
Go easy on me cuz I'm a noob and I suk ;-;
I'd like feedback on my writing and characters.
I'd like feedback on my writing and characters.