- "a great passion to me." --> "a great passion of mine."
- "fate of a yong woman that's on stake here." --> "young"
- "So, have you been in the park the entire time?" --> "So, were you in the park the entire time?"
- "With 'other end of the park', you refer to the position of where you found the body?" --> "By 'other end of the park'...'"
- "Thats not what I meant." --> "That's"
- "It isn't, trust me. And here's hoping that you'll never do." --> "And here's hoping that you never do."
- Usually "Court Record" is capitalized. Also, it's not a bad idea to have the evidence being added displayed on-screen, though it's certainly not necessary.
- Nice little tune for Mr. Spicious!
- "That way I didn't risk to trip over anything I couldn't see." --> "That way, I didn't risk tripping over anything I couldn't see."
- "And I was more than enough to get a clear view of the crime scene once I found it." --> "And it was more than enough to get a clear view..."
- "This is indeed a surprising new information, and enough to further incriminate Ms. Trodectus." --> "This is indeed a surprising new piece of information..."
- "Due to the distance, I couldn't see every single of her facial features, but still enough to tell it was her." --> "I couldn't see every detail of her facial features..."
- "As you see, I am convinced that I saw no other than her that night." --> "As you can see, I am convinced that I saw no one other than her that night."
- "Oh really not?" --> "Oh, really?" (I can't remember the context for this)
- The music ends kind of abruptly when Payne shows the spider pin.
- "But up until now, the worst thing I had to take care off was some littering." --> "off" -> "of"
- "Could you describe this event a bit closer to us?" --> "Could you describe this event in more detail for us?"
- Haha, I like the part where the guard gets nervous and then says he confesses.
- The courtroom scenes don't have the witness.
- "action-movie" --> "action movie".
- There's a long stretch during the "Press" on "I saw one of them pointing a gun at the other" that the security guard just holds his thumb out. Seems kind of odd.
- "Your Honor, defense requests to have this fact added to Mr. Dwerng's testimony." --> "the defense"
- "Could you clearly tell from who each voice came from?" --> "Could you clearly tell from whom each voice came?"
- "The first shout sounded sounded a bit surprised or maybe panicked as far as I could tell." (Too many "sounded" here)
- "Were, and how exactly were you hiding if I may ask?" --> "Where and how, exactly, were you hiding, if I may ask?"
- "So, just to summarize. The scream happened after the gunshot and was had male voice?" --> Get rid of "was".
- "So we can assume that the he did indeed hear a loud, unsilenced gunshot." --> Get rid of "the".
- "There is a very simple reason to what Mr. Dwerng saw, even without a third person." --> "There is a very simple reason for what Mr. Dwerng saw..."
- "There does seem to be something at odd now." --> Get rid of "at".
- "He clearly mentioned that he saw Ms. Trodectus entering the park " (These are two frames that were supposed to be merged, but were not).
- "But didn't Mr. Spicious said that it was the victim?" --> "said" -> "say".
- "We parted ways at the place were the crime would take place. He left, but I decided to stay for a moment." --> "We parted ways at the place where the crime would later take place."
- "You need to fully trust them to be able to defend them with conviction." (I'd write "A lawyer needs to fully trust their client to be able to defend them with conviction." instead here. (The pronouns were getting confusing).